The Good Kind

[Chris Black]

The Good Kind

Her lungs are deep, as she screams under me.
Beneath her breath, I hear a ton of grief,
but the whore begged to succumb to me.
Blame the victim? No, but some could see
she wanted it;
Wearing a big tee & nothing underneath.
At sight of her bare legs, I’ve become a beast,
lifted her shirt and begun to ease into her.
Her scratches on my chest begin to hurt.
I go hard, ‘til sweat starts to drench my shirt.
Entrenched in dirt, we fight in the leaves,
in the backyard. . . Just right, is the breeze.
The trees block the light from the street,
so no one can see the sights that I see;
Her, begging and fighting to flee.
Fighting to breathe, but I smack the whore,
causing her to tear up & scratch some more.
“Beg for this dick, & I‘ll be merciful!”
BEG FOR IT and I MIGHT stop hurting you!”
She starts to beg for it. I can’t hold my glee.
“Please, papi!,” she replies, & cums all over me

I collapse next to her. . .

Monday; this is the day we leave for “rape”
Tomorrow, she plays the “Sweetish maid”
To some, these games are savage,
But trust me - they saved our marriage.



Rape; The Good Kind.

[Uben. Pwnd]

I liked this alot Chris, good vocabulary that described the scene and provided an indepth images.

Entrenched in dirt, we fight in the leaves,
in the backyard. . . Just right, is the breeze.
The trees block the light from the street,
so no one can see the sights that I see;
Her, begging and fighting to flee.

All I can say to this one is wow, I was almost shocked but this is the kind of writing I expect to see from Btk. But to see you pull this off and do it exceptionaly was awesome.
Flow was decent, I think a line or two read a little awkward to me, but I'm going to re-read this and see if can catch it...After carefully re-reading it, it goes good so nevermind my previous statement.
But you provided a good image and this peice was well written. Good job Chris. Seriouslly.

If you could return the favor to good Ol' Uben.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...le-383864.html
I'd very much appreciate it.

[Cody Nash]

lmfao, this was cool. I liked the theme for it. personally never seen a role-playing piece before as far as sex goes lol. so this was a pretty tight read, made me chuckle in the end... definitely descriptive. not your best work, but this was still really dope lol. the flow was great, you never fell off, and you had each word rollin' right off the tounge.

Wearing a big tee & nothing underneath.
At sight of her bare legs, I’ve become a beast,
lifted her shirt and begun to ease into her.
Her scratches on my chest begin to hurt.
I go hard, ‘til sweat starts to drench my shirt.

^that shit was pretty dope... I dug it! lol. real descriptive. dunno if it was suppose to be a comedic type piece but in the end to me it was. worked out well though my dude...


good read, glad to see you drop some shit still.




- Cry




go give proper feed on me and burdizzles piece sucka. lol.

[Flavin.]

damn dude. ive always liked what you write and agian this was really good. i didnt see that ending coming. you put this together really nice..

The trees block the light from the street,
so no one can see the sights that I see;
Her, begging and fighting to flee.
Fighting to breathe, but I smack the whore,
causing her to tear up & scratch some more.

^^was my favorite part of this. this all flowed together very well and the whole peice kept me hooked. wasnt any part that fell off on this one. you imagery was real nice on here as well. was really good. one of my favorite that ive read in a while.

[Born To Kill]

Pretty sick shit, Chris...

Definitely dope.
Definitely twisted.

Yet, sweet and honest at the same time. Nice emotion from you...cool to see it. You've been dropping angry as fuck lately. Nice to see something different. Not that the other shit ain't good...it's just nice as fuck to see you spread the talent around to other kinds of rhyme.

You deranged young man, you.

Great imagery...great swerve...didn't see that ending coming.
Write more.

Peace

[Twixn...]

wtf is with you and rape...

anyway ill edit with some feed in a abit.

i guess this was a different apporach... i mean not something i would write about by any means... but interesting non-the-less... good work man...

always have pretty interesting language when you drop topicals...

nothing extraordinary but def dope.

[Sting3r]

dungeoun master.. aka.. quit sitting on the bitch..

lmfao

good drop...
the way your weight suffocated the woman..
I'd say.. stop fucking infants
or lose some weight!!!

:P

The quoted bars from Cry.. i agree

[P. Mortuus]

Links in 4 hours or closed.

[Chris Black]

Bleh. I wrote the rules. I know when I need links and it's 10 hours. Don't worry, I'll have plenty of links by then.

[Nahlidge]

Wow. U fucker. lol. Dope twist at the end. I seen how short it was and thought it wasn`t gonna live up to the Chris Black that I like. No homo. But this shit was nuts man. Like it had me thinkin` "Chris is fucked in the head" lol. Seriously. You needa quit bein` pro-audio too and get back on ur topical grizzly more often.

[Chris Black]

^Working on producing now since my voice is officially ghost. Lol. I'm actually impressing myself with this production shit though. I'll post something soon.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ws-384942.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-384941.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...13-384938.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ke-385055.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ch-385096.html

[Joseph Grey]

This was dope... it flowed so smoothly and was so understandable and i feel like this is what a lot of RB pieces should be like... it was a complex subject and so many can relate... role-playing in sex CAN save a marriage lol... I love the title of the piece becuz of how u connected it to rape. To be honest, by the time i was half-way through, i already knew that this was going to be a twist on rape and based on the mutual agreement of it. (i hope u know what i mean by that, i can't word shit sometimes) but anyways, maybe it was a bit obvious for me and not a surprise becuz i have written a rape verse similar to this on RB called Romantic Rapist a while back.

overall dope drop.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ps-384743.html
^FEEEEED MEEEEE

[IconIQ]

The Good Kind
“Beg for this dick, & I‘ll be merciful!”
BEG FOR IT and I MIGHT stop hurting you!”
She starts to beg for it. I can’t hold my glee.
“Please, papi!,” she replies, & cums all over me

I collapse next to her. . .

Monday; this is the day we leave for “rape”
Tomorrow, she plays the “Sweetish maid”
To some, these games are savage,
But trust me - they saved our marriage.



Rape; The Good Kind.

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i'm not used to your structure, so it threw me on my first read, but after a few looks i think i gots it. i feel ya kept it sweet n simple, so pretty much all of that shit came out smooth. in all honesty though, what really made this piece was the twist in the final 4 bars. i didn't really see that coming hah, but it was definately the best way to end it. 1

[SmokaJoka]

alright, got back a little later than expected

well...what can I say that hasn't already been said? I don't like the shortness of it...otherwise, the imagery was nice, not so much on the rhymescheme but you wrote this in preparation your opponent would no show as well....still a very good piece for the topic and the pic in the site battle...sadly went to waste for the battle...but definitely worth an OM nomination and HOF here...don't know why you stopped dropping..you should keep on at what you're good at...

[Chris Black]

Bitch, I'm good at everything.

*kills you*